POV is not a problem so far, although I notice many “authors of Books” only change at chapter breaks. Your handling of this relationship has worked for me. The POV switches are almost like handing off dialog, very smooth for the most part.

Or have…
POV1: slamming the breaks locking eyes “Whoa…”
POV2: hands slamming the hood of the car locking eye “… that was close!”
etc etc

Again sorry for the examples.

What I meant by using overlaps sporadically is…
ie: Chapter – Agent 86 (aka Get Smart) a POV overlap is used near the beginning, and in another chapter 99?, is used near the end.
etc.

Obviously the contents of each chapter are different from each other already, and used sparingly and differently placed in following chapters (Ch12 middle, Ch30 beginning, Ch33 end of the chapter), I think helps to stay away from over using a set story pattern to help “freshen” and renew keep the readers interest piqued.

Anyways, I’m enjoying the story so far and I love the “We’ve just gotten divorced but still battling for child custody and for appearences sake, we do so ever try to remain civil with each over but our emotions are toxicly mixed with an ‘I hate you with every grey matter that matters, but I still somehow remember a past we’ve never had when we were young and in lust/love– *sigh, and shakes their head in self disbelief*’ vibe… specifically since 1) Never been married, 2) No love, 3) No previous lust, and 4)– especially 4) Never had sex with each other.

I think that up until– and including now; the POV switches have been handled admirably well by the both of you. Including the one overlap of a particular moment seen/told through each characters’ view that I’ve spotted.

I tend to see no problem with occasional overlaps as a reader, as long as it is specifically designed to draw attention to a rather dramatic/tense moment “shared”.
ie: POV1= Driver, POV2= Lady. Story-streamline= Driver is late for work and Lady spotted My 2 cents in the crosswalk which and the street light is still in Amber *shrugs*
POV1 and 2 have been seperated leading up to them before locking eyes…

“A lady steps into the street and is scared by a car screeching to a hault as the loud clunk/thunk of her hands slamming the hood echoes throughout the early morning traffic, as she braced herself in the “just barely” avoided collision.
– the lady and the driver, both have an adrenaline rush followed by a moment of “Whoa… that was close!”– could be made more tense with them saying it at same time, with only the windshield between them to mute what they say aloud, but lip-read as eyes locked upon the other to mutter the shared statement of relief.

Then switch to POV3=Me, who’d have been mentioned in POV2′s as the, I don’t know?– the lady’s deaf younger brother that dropped his lucky two cents? Signed to his sister to get it for him, which she does, and POV3 describes their shared wordless moment, whom the irony isn’t lost upon, Driver and sis can’t hear each other, nevertheless understood the other plain as one of his good days.– etc etc…

That works with a suprised entry of a third POV as an overlap avoidance.

tbc…

I have to admit I am having trouble reading it, so I actually highlight it, makes it a hell of a lot easier to see!

As a writer myself, I know how hard it can be to pick up typos, especially your own, your brain reads it differently from your eyes!

Keep having fun!

Thanks so much for the feedback! We’re glad you’re enjoying the love/hate-ness. It’s a blast to write.

Thanks also for catching typos. I didn’t realize “umpteenth” is an actual word. I thought it was slang, so that’s why the spellchecker didn’t catch it. That and being blind to typos after the umpteenth read of my own stuff.

As for “conto”, there’s actually an “l” there. I’m not sure why it’s not legible on your monitor.

I am reviewing this story for e-fiction book club, and I have to tell you that I am really enjoying this story. I love “love/hate” relationships and you have this encapsulated so well!

Some typos I picked up-
Second paragraph – umteeth – I presume should be umpteenth

Let her think she’s in contro – control

It would be so easy to let nature to take its course – remove the second to

Other than that, the POV was great, and the way it overlapped helped to place it in the timeline.

Best I keep reading!

I just have read a good page, and I had no troubles following all the POV switches.

Keep on like this, it’s a good story, and well written.
If you really want to write something absolutely nobody will find difficult to follow, the only solution is to avoid writing.

I’ll keep reading, you keep writing.

Bye