Comments on: Chapter 7: Deliverance – part 16

By: nancy

nancy — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 20:13:54 +0000

Impressed? Coolness.

Thanks for your comments about the dialog in the earlier section. When we do revisions for the e-book and print versions, we’ll keep it in mind.

By: nancy

nancy — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 20:11:13 +0000

Right there with ya! It’ll be a national emergency.

By: nancy

nancy — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 20:10:12 +0000

Mebbe. I wouldn’t put it past him!

By: nancy

nancy — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 20:09:40 +0000

Glad you enjoyed it! It was fun to write.

As for Shane and Joon, that’s what Addison saw, which may not be reality. If you want to know a little more, see the spoiler topic in the forums.

By: Seth

Seth — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 18:31:29 +0000

These last couple parts have been so well written… I’m impressed. I’m still hoping you’ll reconsider the over-obvious dialogue a few sections back.

By: Seth

Seth — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 18:30:35 +0000

When Shane and Addison find out who did this (assuming our authors don’t have something totally bizarre up their sleeves, like ‘everybody dies, the end’), I don’t think running to the next county will do anybody any good. Especially if you had anything to do with the problem.

By: daymon

daymon — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 17:42:19 +0000

Now here is hoping that Ashlynne can help them pull it back together again.

And when Shane and Addison learn that their minds have been messed with. I think I would run to the next country over, I wouldn’t want to be anywhere near them while they rip the place apart.

By: a.m.harte

a.m.harte — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 13:46:41 +0000

Argh! Addison didn’t figure out why Shane was angry! And where he got the image of her and Daniel getting hot and sweaty together….

I bet Daniel staged it all!

By: Heidi

Heidi — Fri, 18 Sep 2009 12:43:06 +0000

Oooh! Action, I love it!

I can’t believe Shane did that with Joon. Addison’s right, he is a wanker. Hehe!